Aight...ill be as constructive as I can..

OH MAN..U need to send this beat....

I like how youre delivery on this was..laid back...u got too many hi's in ure voice...add a few lows here..damn I like how you did this..relgious shit beautiful...

im feelin how u came on this...lyrics real...old shcool real shit..here...I think you cudda switched the flow later on..but this is good..ya pronounciation is good...oh u did switch the flow I like it...

yeah this is the best shti Ive heard from you ma..

emotion was str8 too...things can be improved..however for what u at now this was real bumpable..I liked this alot..keep at it ma

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