^Don't leave feedback like that again or I'll delete your poem.

This was a nice piece. The format and meter of it suggested that it would make an excellent slam styled work. I don't know if you do audio or anything, but it's something to concider because this would be very strong hearing it read aloud with all of the intended tones and vocal shifts. Very quick piece, but I felt like you have very nice wording and a strong tone that really fit the content. Uum ya, hard to really pick apart because it was so short... I'd like to see something quite a bit longer next time just so I can see your versitility. Nice job with this though.