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Old 02-15-06, 04:19 PM   #5
Dervla
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This was alright, your concept was cool, more of a political verse. Anyway's u need to up your complex, I already knew what you was talking abotu as soon I read the 2nd line. Your imaginary is ok, need to in more detail a bit, th emotion was alright, wasn't really feeling it, I suggest to you to revise before you post. Your grammar is alright, I hd to read it a few times just to get th eidea what was you talking about, upp on that, This was a cool lil drop.
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