Voted For: phenom1

Okay, lets see how I can break this down....

Phenom1: You have great wordplay. It's actually very refreshing, and for once, the explanations are needed. Multiple syllable rhyme scheme, descent punches, you got yourself a nice verse. Very lacking in personals, however, which could be your downfall.
Score: 7

Scanz: A lot of personals, but your structure is beat, no real wordplay, and you have no complexity. It's a simple verse, and once you make it heavy and complex, your punches will carry some weight. Add some bigger words to the personals.
Score: 6

Much love.

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