Stanza - ehh, your verse was too short, and the fault in that was that there could not be enough emotion injected in it, and the verse wasn't very complex either, the overall meaning of the topic usage was prety decent, just work on your complexity

Dervla - your verse didnt have a great rhyme scheme either, but you had more complexity with vocabulary and grasp on actual rhyming. the meaning of your shit was good as well, and i think you beat out stanza becaue of your ability to rhyme with complexity, and sanzas lenght was a falut as well

v - dervla

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