Ight, good beat choice...........

hook kicks in...

your quality needs to fixed badly. I would suggest getting a new mic and an amp to get rid of the "rushing water" in the background. You need more emotion, and the echo is too strong, and makes you sound mono toned.

Verse kicks in
The reverb drowns out your verse. Good topic, but you need to keep your delievery consistent, for instance, the pause doesnt work well. It also, it sounds in a few places that you was reading off of a paper more than concentrating on delivering the verse.

Chorus kicks in....
same as above.

2nd Verse
Better than first, your message was a lot clearer. You started off solid, but started to fall off as the verse continued. Yea, work on delievering a more complex flow, because your sentence structure is too elementary right now. Take the reverbs off your voice, and add dubs instead. I suggest getting better equipment, or get someone to help you manage and manipulate your vocals. But this is an average track.

7/10 - would be a little higher if quality was better.


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