ummm...not realy long enough dawg....nice try for anewb....try loner words and lines....make it more complex...use mulit' to make it dope...as i sed not bad for your first go bro...but u gota try to mix up da wordplay and advance on da vocab....yo coment on some open mics.....then you will see ways in witch to make dis beta...nice try ...pz

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