actually Eminem does use alot of punchlines and wordplay, you must not undertsand his lyrics-or are listening to his new shit, which is fucking worthless crap.

that and your punchlines would be ok, seeing as how he is undefeated

you'd wanna also set it up different aswell...for example..

I'm a 'giant' in this fuckin game, why do u think hate is all i get
Cuz its 'revolutionary'...the way i'm smashin this un-defeated 'Patriot'


..something like that would just flow and sound better

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