darkmanner was right but he was just a lil extreme in his feedback. this piece had decent metaphors but it wasnt really linked or compared to anything it was just a pen described in a lot of fancy wordplay.

the wordplay was incredible u didnt make me bored and it was pretty intriguing. i could tell u put time and thought into it alot more than alot of the others on this site. and the words went together perfectly with good flow and rhythm.

my biggest complaint is the structure. i didnt like how u set it up kind of was a lil complicated ta read but still didnt effect much. keep dropping

i give this a 8/10