this was pretty dope, i feel like i understood it completely...i liked your verbiage...your word choice was illmatic...im def impressed with this....i don't think i know who you are..but even the best writers on this site seem to have a petty grasp of what poetry is about...i don't feel that way with you, you seemed to contain elements of poetry to call it structured, and didn't sacrafice much, if anything at all to do it...very well done...please leave feedback on my poem called ..."my nigga"

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