i've gotta give my vote to verentao on this one, it was written so short and sharp. it sounding like someones thought process who was slightly out of his tree, and you managed to convey a whole event in just a few wellk placed words and lines. i've gotta give deacon some credit as well, it WAS pretty close, but your poem was a little too vague in content for my tastes.

vote- varentao