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Sdizzle:
hes always first to lose, and the last one to finish
kids a one man crew... and even hes not wanted in it
not a bad opener.
and i can see why..... not only is his future dark
i couldn't tell he existed.. till i seen where his eyes start
seen=saw, dialogue check.
man uv always been wack, its not that hard to see
kids a herb on real sites.... but a fucking god on rv
what?
u be buggin me all the time, u need to mind ur business
and god the king of the wack..
...& this rulers still short a couple inches
eh okay. a bit jumbly.
ur names wack..u aint gansta, so lets toss out the g
and the kid wouldn't come dope even with the o.d
punch was there, but worded all wrong.
*gave great effort, ya spent some time on punches, needed better personals. ya wordplay was lacking and there were a few parts ya lines didnt make sense (dialogue/tone). dont sweat it, overall decent read.
God:
RV's heads just ain't seein' you, kid, you have no place on the sight
And if I wanted to see old jokes, son, I'd just tune in to Nick at Nite
[b]good set up. good punch. vocab?
So I'll just leave dizzle lying dead here, but ain't this shit the truth?
His roots originate from RB.... & his God punches are from there too
nice.
God's a pro at takin' hits, 'cept ur con-cept's were already swung, b
I'd accuse ya of biting personals, but I know ur ass was just hungry
lol. decent set up.
Our User Titles are equal, but see, in text or life we're not a match
Cause while God is on a fuckin' roll... sdizzle's just fuckin' rolls of fat
lol. good comedy.
So I guess the only way to settle this is split the title, with no hate
Cuz my bars may hit Heavy, but damn, dizzle wins with the Weight!
lmao. nice closure.
*personals and punches were good, wordplay and structure were decent. no vocab. ya still win. good read.
vote: God
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