Ight real tight beat...................
you come in, really good flow on this one man. You fit the perspective of what the first verse should sound like. More emotion though, you were a little too monotone for this track. Good shit, better than what i thought you would bring to the table. Solid drop, not much to say that you should have done better.
Ight, Chorus is pretty coo, once again, emotion is a factor.
Second verse, really elementary type flow. Too much "south side" rhyme scheme, nothing that sets him apart from the regular. Flow was ight, vocab needs to be upped.
Third verse-
Seems to me that you didnt know what you should say. The "I'm coming, I'm coming..." was really not tight.
Second dude sounds a lot better on his sentence structure. Good transition from one to another. Good quality on entire track.
Overall, decent track, lacks the "wow" that a hype track should be. Needs more emotion from both.
7/10
rtf
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