Nice piece here........

I liked the way you started and finished, jus coulda spent abit more time in the middle.Made it seem rushed in the end to be honest.
It was a nice read tho dude, easy to read and picture painted fine...
It's a different topic u chose here, only fault is there was alittle bit more description of how he lost the plot i think....
Flow was coo.

8/10 good drop fella.