brittany: your opener started out halfway decent, then you killed it with the second line, you should've gone with a punchline,instead of a like rhyme. you had a few decent punches..I was sort of feelin' the santa claus punch, the others almost lost meaning by the second half ..keep at you have potential.....your structure was good, each line flowed well into the next, there was a little problem with your sylable cout, but that was only a minor problem.you had a few nice metaphors, the aircraft line particuliarly stood out. you had some wordplay, you get props for that. your closer was umm ehh, to tell you the truth it was kinda dumb,but your new to this, so like I said kee practicin'.....

metahphysiks: your opener wasn't bad, your multiples worked well, but the whole broke, bent, snapped your spine punch is super played....your punches were really one-tracked, sexual punches are really amature in my opinion, but most of them hit hard, just try not to focus on that next time ayite...you had multiples spread throughout your verse, most were good, some weren't.....your structure was really good, making the whole verse easy to read..no metaphors here....no wordplay.........
your closer was just dirty...I winced afte I read it, but it was pretty good, also sort of humorous........keep it up both of you............

vote:metah
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