Nice Idea for a topical, I like how common ideas can be presented in different perspectives. It was pretty easy to picture and follow but a couple points had me like eh, whats happenin now. I thought the overal story being told was ok, but the way you involved the reader made it more interesting. I was kinda' hoping for a different ending, but not bad, lyrics were on point, flow was good except for a few repetitive spots, it was enjoyable and didnt bore the reader, keep it up, make any more let me know'

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