uhm yeh

atticus - *copies post from rb* yeh i read this on rv, shit was dope. this seemed to have a slurred word scheme that brought multisyllable strings along very well, and with not any over the top vocabulary, but enough to make it seem complex, the quptes however, did seem to mess up the meter, i also loved how you took the topic and jut made it a little more complex and metaphorical than most peopel would've done.. so good job woith that, and great job with the piece.

colb - uh, enough slang and incorrect spelling. rhyme scheme was decent. lol at the originality though, i give yout hat, but it wasn't that good.. not atrocious at best like powit said... but pretty bad

v- self

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