ok this emotion was good and the concept and delivery...however your vocab and structure and word'd story telling aint really on point man....you strucuture is what makes a great readable drop...mix shit up like some nice mutlie creative emotion descriptive type of shit aight?!..
you emotion was there and concept i just feel that you word'd stuff wrong and came a lil wack on the structure though but nice try and drop for a nice emotional approach...you will get better trust i see potential aight?!...keep em coming!

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