the concept was great....even though this is a long written....some parts seemed rushed

i was friendly with a kid who never loved school
saw right through the rhymes and rules
he was every schoolgirl's secret crush
so he opted for the silver screen
livin' out an american dream
everything that he had didn't add up to much
till he ran into a little sweetheart
who headed his way... he said
'you're the prettiest girl that i ever have seen'
she said 'hey i think i like you and you're headed my way
then again im only 17...

^^^^^^ this verse for instances seemed rushed to me....u ending it with "then again im only 17".....thats it ?.....could of added more to this verse.....

overall i give this an 8/10....~1~ keep writing

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