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Old 12-11-04, 04:17 PM   #12
Terse.
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Ya verse wasnt bad...the first bar was stretched, but the rest of the lines were straight...there was a decent flow to it...punches actually connected well...but the only thing is, ya punches were played out...shit like "u've got two dads" and "tossed salad" are played yo...but i still liked ya last line tho, i've never seen it flipped like that...


Plutonium:
Not bad, but definitely not ya best....structure was coo so there was a good flow....opener was good, but the 'picture' & 'art' shit was startin to git old quick...but punchwise, u still managed to connect....overall, u had a lil more creativity cuz of concepts that were more fresh...

V/ Plutonium, but not by much...