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Old 03-27-09, 09:23 PM   #9
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My punches make em C IV, i'l make em feel weary
Cuz even a trans plant just makes this grown man a fairy
wordplay was kinda forced, needs better wording, but it was a good attempt
Its quit obvious, he stays on-line, cuz in reality he always chokes
Yeah civil literally handin out cash?? Just a cover on how he sways votes
lol funny, could have been worded harder though
Kid claimin he's a thug and g...check his youtube, tha kids a dweeb
Hes so fuckin dense even he can't finnnnd ooouutt how to runa league
LOL @ the youtube, this concept playing off his sig would be waaayyy harder with some better wording, but it was still decent
So stay tru to ur place Civil, u runnin all over the streets
Only cuz i placed you there bitch....with my bat and feet
ok
N everyone should thank this dude, he's thinkin it through
Avatar under his name, just a Caution of how bad his bars will do
decent flip on the avatar, not the greatest though
N Here's the dilema, i'd hand ya dope shit by i'd rather stall
Cuz this whole league only vote's One Way, or not at all.
seen this nameplay dont before, but not the same way. This was ok

vs.

i know you think u raw dog, but rep to the def? is that true?
Apparantly, since you the only fucker on the whole site still reppin a crew
this was ok but the personal was forced since he aint reppin a crew right now, an the crew was a joke from the get-go
U aign the best, you a fluke! "....on the daily" shiiiit, thats why u still in the hole
Cuz honestly the only way i see coke ''destroyin tricks'' is with his cereal bowl
lmao wtf? Funny but you shoulda worded this better to have something to do with eating, like call him fat or something like that iunno, it wasn't too hard to me
I know ya'v heard it....
...I eat pieces of shit like u for breakfast! u cant compete w/ me dog
Kid started doin his own product, now look @ the bitch. HE AIGNT eatin @ all.
wasn't really feeling this
I'll toss the street with one of YOUR balls... throw you around like trash son
Cuz if thats the 3.5 u ratin on other peoples lines you needa go back to math 101
rhyme scheme was strange here, and not the best punch
read what you wrote? i dont even like the feed in ya votes, Y hope 4 the win
When coke just gon turn up his nose....or go back to smokin the stem
ok
Dog you gon be eliminated THIS WEEK, so how you gon sign out next week
Go ahead be the dealer.....coke, and follow me to the next league
nah

I think you both need to work on your wording and rhyme schemes, but overall this battle was kinda close and I enjoyed it, i'd have to say coke did better in this though, I felt he had better concepts and attempted harder punches, I really think with some better wording you guys can be wayy better, cuz a lot of those punches I was feeling like hmm, that's clever, this could be made into a hard as fuck punch if he worded it better. Take some time to think bout that and work on it

overall cool battle, v/coke
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