Yo i hope you prepared for lyrical assassaination
cuz i flow like female menstruation
{b] i expected more with this opening.. follow through didnt hit much, no real punch there, played concept onthe follow through[/b]
you spit nasty-- only cuz you practice oral masturbation
sure you Marvolous, at anal penetration
follow through line was sorta of a weak punch.. directed, and was an iight personal
you better check da station before you rep yo nation
I spit harshly, cuz it's whigga you facin'
filler... Not much of a punch or metaphor... just somthing to add bars i suppose
my weed is laced in
PCP and crack, but they'll never trace 'em
again filler
back to me cuz all my tracks, i erase 'em
from the ones on my arm, to the coke in my basement
theres no punch here
I'm 17, spittin shit is my teenage wasteland
not diggin this ending, it was a filler..

Your lacking metaphors and punchs... Your verse wasnt directed to your opponent. It flowed well ya but it didnt really contend well as a battle verse..


Listen...white boy since u wanna play me and spark //
da beam on da 3 80 is dark,i'll leave ya spline in ya green avey & ya lady in dark //
{b] opening was alright... Not really directed punchs though[/b]
u not nice dogg u just ""OLD AND GASSED"" like u ""80 AND FART"" //
be serious ya bars is trash u couldn't ""BEAT ME"" if u gave me ya ""HEART"" //
the wordplay on this is iight.. Meta is straight... the punchs was ok
beef with jay fagget i'll be in ya hood squeezin-glocks //
i'll catch u in ya wip & put ya ""CHEST ON YA BRAKES"" just da make ya ""BREATHIN STOP"" //
the follow through is over drawn, the punch is kind of weak, but your meta is ok
....can we get some votes
i know u gota feel like da ""ODD"" 1 on rap battles cuzz u aint ""EVEN"" hott //
look unda my name fagget u should know im commin-sick //
eh, sort of a play concept with the odd even part.. punch could have been in there a little more
prick if u blingin runnin it quick,cuzz da gun and clipp //
a leave u with ""FOOD 4 THOUGHT"" when i put ya ""BRAIN"" where ya ""STOMACH"" sit //
you follow through would have come off ill if you used a little re wording.. ending is ok.. decent verse.

You had alright metaphors/wordplay.. flow was overdrawn at parts.. punchs were ok, could have worked on more personals..


Vote- MarvolousJwun009
His punchs took it, he came with more, flow was kind of off but made up for it with his metas

Peep the battle and drop an honest vote
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107825

__________________