Paramik... paramik... paramik. I look at this piece once or twice and go "shit, this guy's a very talented writer"... and you are, just look at the structure, vocab, flow and wordplay in this piece and it's tremendous. But to be 100% honest man, I read this five times and had no idea what the fuck it was talking about. It was far too abstract for my liking and I think you'd be better writing a piece with alot of imagery and a few abstract bars tossed into the mix. The jist i got from this piece was about a man who was ruining his life with poor decisions and the effects his actions were having on him. Was I right? Overall, well written piece, good potential, way too fucking abstract.

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Was he robbed of the ashphalt that cushioned his face?