myself-Ive seen better from you..though your imagery was dope. had a good story line and the sort of twist thing was pretty cool...theres not much to say reall other then hands down you have it.

lampejo- your verse should have been drawn out more...i feel you left out some key parts of emotion or imagery...shoulda kept going man...just didnt cut it

v/myself.

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