Ennui: I can tell you didn't really put much into your verse at all. It was basic and left me unfulfilled. This could have been really nice, like you could have had a dope creative central metaphor infuged with the images of angels. It wasn't like you dropped wack or anything, I can just tell you rushed it and could have done a lot more with it. Nothing in your verse really jumped out at me or impressed me much.

Wireless: Your verse was bland in some areas but your underlying concept was deeper than Enui's. I really liked two of your lines.

"N. Korea? Iran? Suadi Arabia? We don't even know who the batta is!
World War 3 is eminent, result of a reaction..
The so-called "War on Terrorism" is obviously the catalyst.."

"Through the bullets, through the flares, through the cannonballs landing
That during that battle at Fort McHenry...That tattered flag was still standing"

^Those were the best lines of the battle and impressed me. The war and terrorism take is commonly done at the moment but your piece was deeper than Enui's and more complex. You still have a few things to work on like filler lines.

"My mind shoots back to remember history; it consoles me, helps me catch my breath"

^That was very stretched and filled in. But you took this with a deeper verse.

V/ Wireless