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Old 10-10-04, 12:13 PM   #8
The Jett
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Alright.
First off, Schema. You came way stretched to begin with.
Sizing down does not increase flow. Sorry.
The metiphores you threw were vaugly played.
For instance. OJ's glove has been flipped a million ways.
You had personals' but obviouse ones.
Yes, You CAN over research a person.
Latin Kitten proved that. And, also....what happened to punches?

As for Nos.
You had a lil bit on longevity in each line.
But I'll be honest, I like you ryhme scheme alot better.
It FLOWED.
Thats important, Also you had sum funny and hard personals.
Including this one....
Best Bar of The Battle:
Son please.. You talk so much shit, ya mouth resembles a rectum..
Previous battles I checked em, So wack, even his avatar left him..


You see....
He's smart, He used a personal first. And made it the second line.
And then created a great wordplay/metiphoricla set-up.
Thats what wins battles.

People Dont Notice this....
THEY SHOULD. -1
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