honestly...i lyke seeing something total different in text, but you had a nyce flow going....structure was iight

cause I was da 'first ta take flight in rap' call me 1 of da rap ~Orville Brothers~
^i liked that....

If yall dont ~wanna get sprayed some~ then ya better ~run when dat day come~
cause Ill leave you wit enough 'holes' ta look like da ~front of some A1's~
^im feeling the multis...and metas

aye this wasnt bad at all....you came a lot stronger on the second verse...and started showing what you can do....i see ya, mayne....keep writing....

return the favor if ya havent?....BIRTH OF A GODDESS.

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..:: Artik In The Phlesh::..
.Re-Writing The Re-Run.