beofre i say who one, let me give some pointers


MD- Please dont put " " around things that are refrences, they aren't neccessary...another thing i dont like or suggest is the '.........' punches, they make your punch seem really forced.

LP-I dont see how party and slobberying rhyme at all??? seemed like a rushed punch.

as far as your punches go...

MD-I liked the concept as far as trying to make a current punch work, it could have been alot harder, wish you would have made more of a connection with water on his brain and LP stronger, becuase i guess maybe i dont understand how water on his brain is a hard punch?? I did like the pakistan connection, its just, you made a refrence to something thats happening, and tried to just throw LP in their.

LP-Your punch started off strong, but the Toga party thing just ruined it....like car smashing into a wall....tottally killed your punch.

Vote-MD

keep at it guys

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