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Old 09-19-05, 07:56 PM   #22
Chew187
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Spektical was that rap or a short story for children?I know you can do better than that bro! Drama Queen ~good flow but the contents could use improvement also you gotta switch a lil more ofton you keep trying to carry the same rhyme to the next sentence just keep shit simple and you'll get on a roll, trust me. Both of you need to put more heart into it make it real for somebody to listen to. Both of you get a 5/10 and thats just the way it is. I look forward to hearing you on audio and see if you have anything ,I'll try to read your next one if i get the chance PEACE everyone's a critic