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Old 05-04-08, 03:16 AM   #15
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Voted For: Da Problem Child

damn this is a fucking weak battle. No offence at all to either of you, Im glad to see you both battling. But you both need to step your game up.

First of all, creativity is lacking, both of you need ot look outside the circle and come up with some creative punches and approaches ot your battles.

Secondly, learn to fucking spell correctly. The spelling in this is shamefull. Before you say it, yes it is a text verse, so spelling is important.

Structure, The Kid nate, your structure isnt too bad. When writing bars, keep out of syllables in your bar length, keep them the same. This makes for better reading, more smooth setups and better text flow.


The Kid nate, you have no standout punches, but you do win on structure and flow. You rverse came together alot better, but is lacking hard hitting punches and creativity.

Da Problem Child you have some seriously wack shit in your verse bro.
example:

i am a Problem ur just a kid who needz a father
he's da perfect example on why u shoudnt use cheap condums


That is a pointless opener bro and you shoul dof bounced into battle mode alot more solid than that.
You rflow is off, including that huge stretched and force3d punch.
Your punches are simple and not creative at all, you need to learn to set your punches up and then execute them to hit hard!!

You do win on the fact you do have punches in your verse, even if they are weak as fuck.

No hate, real talk.