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Old 09-03-05, 02:35 PM   #9
Given Light.
Given Light
 
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Vote/ Queen. More imagery, better vocab. Can I get a "Wtf" with that structure? Damn girl, theres good structure, but that's just crazy. Flowed pretty good, some of the rhyming seemed a little forced. You had some complexity within your rhyming which was nice. Props.