Content~

"Salutatuions patrons....i'm a sinner with ongoing self conflictions
Why are the fights like these..attempts at living righteously
Render myself almost content when the night light leaves
This citys illuminated manuscripts contain my pipers dreams!..:sighs:
Plummers thoughts...yes indeed....all that good ish...in my dream
I spelled "help" in the sand with a sharpened wood stick seen
But it never 'shook wind!'..nowadays I help myself for fulfillment
Amongst this perplexing maze of "utencils galore" and 'footprints' "

This was superb...For a number of reasons...the message is introduced early on and then defended in the next couple of lines with fantastic imagery, wordplay, and perfect word choices. Really extremely well written and great opening bit.

"Striving to lift the drawbridge manning that lighthouse for perfect pathways hopefully
Things will get better as of late 'lifes hard' meeting those halfways,my complexions varied
From caramel to yellow overlaped with 'bright scars'..attitudes usually that calm and mellow Home aloner but damn you know this all already dontcha? Serendipitously seeking satisfying Sweet serenity...salvation surely 'suckers'! until its the end of mi this hearts been 'crushed up'
..:sighs:..Im a six foot one eighty blispanic irish indian...walking!...fucking!...:sighs:...pillbox!,
That lovely rich pharmacists perscripted daily planner fingertiped distributed from
Your self contributed abilities to uplift the will to live in me !!!", damn yallz..what a ventriloquist!!"

once again, great imagery in the beginning lines..Great insight given unto the speaker in this part, we sort of see his attitude emerging and a little bit of reasoning as to why he is a sinner starting to surface..Nice alliteration with the "s" in that middle line, good, balanced use of poetic elements.

"These tarnished wings need refurnished for flight away to a brighter day
The citys screaming yet I wish that everyday was like today (sung)
And oh....some last words....fine...fuck you in clarity for all of those that thought you knew me...
Only a select few among higher planes only witness me truly,to my realest money's not worth You id take that bullet to preserve you, i'll be here for you forever honestly representing every Aspect of a person,as a best friend a musician that daily comic or friendly servant..with love.. "

Very powerful, I love the personification and imagery in the "city screaming", great line..The anger and intensity is so profound in this bit.."tarnished wings" also a great reference and symbol of sin..

And the 'finale of sorts'..Very original and creative way to end it..seemed sort of a play, rather than a poem..I dont know how mnay different ways i can come up with for saying "great imagery and very well written"...so I'll just keep repeating them to make it understood. GREAT IMAGERY, VERY WELL WRITTEN!!
Great Job, Content..I expected nothing less from you.

MADD~

"Why?
To these ends I meet my demise, an yet all of you have been there…
Through my triumphs…many a great victory…and alas yet, my despair…
My children…who art in heaven, may my message heal thy bleeding hearts…
Do not cry for what I have become…it is best that from this realm I depart…"

This is a great opening, I really felt it..You came up with a creative way to introduce the topic, I love that whole stanza, from it we get subtle glimpses of the speakers background, present and even future...Very nicely written.

"I am changing…but to what I know not of…
I am fearful for you all…and yet am I?…the answers you seek are from above…
I love you all, and always have…countless joy have you brought me since each your birth…
There are no words I can explain verbally…but can bee seen through joy and mirth…
Toward these ends…these ends, the corruption of blood, I am cursed…
But dare you leave me like this now? Why, I created you all… you were to be my successors!
Do you not gaze upon me and pity my disposition…or does your subconscious depict that my demise is for the better?"

This is where the piece takes an interesting turn, I think..The speaker seems to go from a calm introspection, or analyzation of himself, to suddenly getting mad at....whoever "they all" are.

"Why…why, means more that it implies…
Can you not see? I can…I have seen it in each and every of your eyes…
This is how you shall leave me? This is your way of showing your gratitude?
Toward your mentor who taught you… and loved you… then cast me to the way side to a state of mental solitude!
I am that superior, to the goals that you seek…the state of nirvana envisioned by me is the only way....
I hold the keys…the secrets that you seek…I am the absolute being that can open the gateway!"

I'd say this way my favorite part..splendid imagery and good job of getting the reader to see things exactly the way the speaker does...

"And you hold me from achieving this last, my attempt in what time I have left among you?
For it is I! who will shift and cultivate a new! Among which you seek to bring equilibrium…ha ha ha…you fools!
I wish your wings to burn, just as the dwelling to which I have been restrained to, through mind, body, and, soul…
May my spirit haunt you!…may my soul exceed that of these walls to daunt onto you all!!
Come one…come all…my rise shall be the coming of all your fall…"

Wow..the last line was tremendous...A wicked kind of impact it harbored..And of course the last part..very interesting and creative way to end it..
Very Nicely done, Madd.

I knew i was doing a hell of a thing when I partnered you two up for this battle.......It's interesting the differences in the verse, how Content's speaker seemed one to maybe seek forgiveness, while Madd's showed no remorse. Makes it even harder to judge, for they both were equally effective in their messages...

Madd, your piece was very powerful, both in its presentation and all around aura....It had that whole "mwuahahaa" vibe to it...which I've seen that a lot in your pieces...
Content, your piece had beautiful poetic power, in all of the imagery, word usage, word play, alliteration, personification..I like the approach you took, the way you chose to make these "last words of a sinner" something somewhat positive..
Madd, if you would have stayed on the same tone that you had in the first 4 lines, you might have won this in my eyes...You were strong when you focused on yourself, but when you started yelling and incorporating everyone else into the piece, it kind of lost focus and intensity, for me anyway.
This was close, but Im voting for CONTENT.
All of the elements combined in his piece, I feel made it somewhat more appealing to read..Its like, if the pieces were paintings..both were colorful~Madd's had crazy brush strokes, while Content's had smaller details that had a big effect on the big picture.(the small details being with the imagery, personification, word play, ect.)..Hope that wasnt too confusing of a metaphor...
Nice job by both poets tho.
VOTE: CONTENT

SHIZNIT, DEACON, CAMARAC, OR PHRANTIK will be needed to break this tie.