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Old 12-23-05, 08:23 PM   #8
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Blackmage:
Your flow was to text like which isnt good for topicals! Your imagery was aight nothing special as u kept going off on weird shit in parts but some parts were dope! Emotion was probably the best part of your topical for me,very sad!Vocab was aight but needs to be up'ed! I like how u ended it to very good!

Past Tense:
Same to you dawg,flow wasnt up to scratch.Emotion got better near the end!Also i like the "story" kinda feel to it!magery was very story like put nice. Emotion is good due to it changing in the 1st and 2nd verse! Ending vey sad! A way to make this better is the same as i said for blackmage try to up ya vocab it would sound a whole lot better.

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