i agree with valor about the shortness of your lines, but it was worth reading... a bit depressing tho... a really played topic, but your piece was original enough not to be another one of those pieces i read half of then look elsewhere... nice piece playa, keep writing...

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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..."
-Konchance

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