first of all...
1. it has to be around 16 lines minimum...I dont know if cutting the lines in half like that works for the rules(we'll see)
2. u have to leave feed back on atleast 2 other peoplez shit and post the link in which u did it at.
thats just so u dont get closed down.

honestly...I liked it. its very dirty south. no lyrical shit. just simple I'll clap the shit out u type of real shit. but u do need to fix ur structure to make it more text presentable. check out the tutorials on this site to learn how to right a verse on net forum shits. I give ur verse... 4/10. keep that shit up dawg.

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