yo, i was feelin' the flow... you commented on mine to work on imagery... I'll say the same 2 you... you skipped thru ideas too quick..
"Take a stand against the masses,
dont allow them to pull you under
The meaning of life?
A Calendar. all our Days are Numbered.
a Slave to the slumber,
but i'll fight with answers
and write what i believe in,
just to higher the standard.
cause Twilight in a stanza, create something to test the loops"

you had like 4 seperate thoughts in there.. it flowed an' whatnot but could've been conveyed more clearly...

I like your use of vocab an' deep wordplay... you usually bring that tho.. ummm, all I can really say other than that is tighten up ur flow a littel, some places it dropped off... some beats do that, but I odn't know what u wrote it to or where certain bridges are..

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