Thread: Drifting
View Single Post
Old 05-10-05, 12:57 PM   #3
Dervla
Poet's Daughter.
 
Dervla's Avatar
 
Posts: 360
IP:

This was ok. I like your imaginary, it's creative. The emotion needs was ok, i though it should be upp a little. The balance of your vocab was good. Overall, good poem, keep writing. Use meta'z to make your imaginary more complex.

Return a favor, please. http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=189712


S~A
__________________
mystery Is a Freak!!

ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*
Send a message via AIM to Dervla   Reply With Quote