It was alright. Let me give you some pointers so you can live up to that name of yours. First try to work on vocab in the begining it didn't rhyme..poems dont have to rhyme.. but towards the end it didn't. Your work will come out better if you follow one set pattern for your poem... like abac or baba... or just bb aa ... I'm sure you no what those mean. If not holla at me. You have talent. Keep Elevating OoNnEe