Instead of a poem -- it came off much more in a storytelling sense. Your wording was inbetween the phase of elementary and complex. So it was just right. Flowed pretty well, I was able to envision what you were talking about. And the emotion had me also feeling what you wanted me as a ready to envisualize. This was a nice read -- again more storytelling then a poetry feel. Keep writing.

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