shit was ok, agreeing with in-vision here, some of the lines seemed out-of-wack to me... like thats not what u really ment but because of the space u had no choice to leave it at that.... its cool tho. piece was alright, good lines and stuff, has its meaning, but make it longer, explain what u really feel, cus u just kept repeating yourself, only with different words... keep posting kid, dont let your head down.

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