Wow this stuff is tottally over my head, i feel thick lol, i didnt understand many lines but this one below i did, and i thought it was ill as fuck,

If I ever break the cycle perhaps ill finally
ask this question..
Why did those fat cats accept and
retain me from my brethren....

i really aint the best person to be judging poetry coz i dont know it from adam, lol, but what i saw and understood was good, nice work