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Old 12-26-05, 01:03 PM   #3
D.Zaster
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A Descent peice man.

The opening stanza wasnt too good though, the rhyming scheme seemed forced.

But it gradually got better. And ended as a descent poem.


Getting accustomed to the calloused knees
Losing the will to leave everyone pleased

^^ that was dope man, very deep.

Overall not a bad peice atall.

Keep writing
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