This tourny is more topical then poetry...

Wordz dont take any offence by it i've been writing for along time and im more known for my writtens then text so dont be offended if you lose... you had a good piece you just need to elevate in some areas... like put some metas in there along with some eternal rhyme scheme and your imagery and emotion could be beefed up aswell.. you just need to write more and think of something completly different granted the piece you wrote might have been from real life there has been 1000 pieces like that written on here and other sites... people like to see abstract writing compared to stuff they ahve seen before