i would of gave a good feed back but i u guys made my eyes hurt and squent the whole time with a // and then u keep on typing on the same line which made it hard..

try doing this,

im raw, and likely to brake ya jaw
chop ya style down without useing a saw

or

u'r to basic just face it /
one hit gonna give ya dome a face-lift/

that looks way better but still it was a decent drop,
but ya can be more creative ya was also preety basic,
but decent crew drop...

i give ya 6.5 outta 10