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Old 02-03-05, 08:29 PM   #15
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imagery-none, didnt sense any from both, they were both fully emotional verses in my opinion and didnt have imagery...or enough for me to notice

flow-Anxiety, not a lot of ajaxs verse was offcourse i only spotted 1 or 2 bars that the syllables didnt match up perfectly but it was always like 1 syllable off it wasnt nothing to be big about but drama had more because of her higher vocab...but from now on i dont consider vocab in my voting, you can put as much as you want or as little as you want...but if it messes up the flow its going to go against you and here it did a little but not too much you also had a descent flowing verse...

beginning/end-Drama Queen, i liked the beginning of ajaxs verse but it felt too simple...now i know you dont use a big vocab and thats your style and it works great for you but this opener it just seemed too simple...the end was good also but i liked drama queens beginning and ending better...dramas beginning had a great wording that made it much more complex then anxietys opener...but the ending i liked because it gave an answer to question but flipped in 2 answers like that truth is never simple...and yet it is, i liked that a lot

emotion-Drama Queen i guess this is what it boils down to...
both had an extremely good amount of emotion this was the hardest aspect but i think drama pulled this off...
what stood out in anxietys verse to me was the questions like...

Live to die, but dont we actually just die to live?
If heaven is so much greater, why waste time with this?

^dopest bar of the whole verse in my opinion and this was what most of the verse was...but what happened was the verse was too short...if you brought more lines of this i would of gave you the vote but it was only 20 and i thought drama had all the emotion packed into her 20...i think almost every single bar she had in her verse was like the one in your verse and dramas was just dope with that from the beginning till end and left you thinking and it just had a stronger sense of emotion...overall vote Drama Queen

this was a really good battle and even though my vote wont count since its like 5-1 i just thought id drop anyway...

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