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Old 12-15-04, 04:19 PM   #11
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Voted For: Elemental Soul

I Was Feeling This Verse Better...
It Had Better Direction And Storyline...
Led Went Off To Much Into Tryna Get Vocab An Shit In...
He Had Two Stories Instead Of One Tite One...
I Just Really Wasnt Feeling It...
And I Think You Need To Be More Aware Of Your Reader...
Cuz Most People Wont Understand All That Vocab...
I'm A Topical Writer And Have A Large Vocab Myself So I Know The Meanings...
But Your Average Rv Head Would Be Lost...
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