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I really like the words you chose to rhyme...because, it didn't seem force...once in awhile I thought the lines got a little choppy...but, it was alright because it worked for this piece. Interesting topic I suppose, I like that what you see and how you are receiving every detail in life...it was a cool way to put everything in perspective. Sometimes, I think you may of used more delicate words...if you know what I mean? Some words will leave a better and bigger impact on the reader if chosen correctly...other then that I thought this was a very nice piece and I enjoyed reading it...
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