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New to RB
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IP:
i like ur word choice also
actually tha only thing i saw wrong with it is your structure
when u look at it all u see is a big mass of grey...and no one wants to read that
so spread it out more and shorten u lines
u should be good then
by tha way u should go return tha favor and drop somefeedback 4 my tow poems:
"your pain is my pain" and "turn for tha worse"
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