Introducing alot n this one and Ill go in depth about it later...Im going to use Feeble Minded's verse against Reckless in this cause its prolly one of the best spits on this site that isnt in a battle thats not closed...I'd use something enygma used recently but it may promote swaying...ok so anyways heres Feebles verse...
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Originally Posted by world famous
u copy RB vets styles & punches, i'll swallow this head
cuz even orders are sick and tired of u following them ..
pussy, i'll tell on u for cheatin, but won't get my tattles far
cuz i realized ur names missing the "W" like ur battles are
im waiting to beat Spul, a must when flowing, fuck..
your hated so much.. u make a-rival just by showing up
i`ll wreck some, with no affection - get whored & perish
if you could step son, it'd be by a former marriage
and remember that, whats the cost to be reminded?
ya sig'll go from winning streak to "Loss to feeble minded"
don't speak in my presence, faggot, itll end with hatred
cuz ur room to talk is about to get fucking renovated
cuz you've got fans on here man, but confess it they ..
gave me more respect than u when I came here yesterday
the lesson? sway, cuz u got no style for boastin kid
matter fact, only kinda form u got is the one u posted in
its no guess i'll protest, but wont let up the beating
i mean.. my fists & ur face should set up a meeting
even Phenom-in-all hates u, nobody bought it though
till he said 'im out like spuls chance of makin good audio'
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Now here is verse displays awesome witty punches...most of RV doesnt even understand this...and thats why I am doing this...
u copy RB vets styles & punches, i'll swallow this head
Ok, now the first line gets you intro'd to the punch...you get the point that he is going to make a punch out of this statement...
cuz even orders are sick and tired of u following them ..
And he delivers it with a clever, witty meta...for the slow people that are still saying "no it sucks ass"...he is talking about a delivery (UPS, FedEx) and you tracking it on the internet...see, i told you it was good!
pussy, i'll tell on u for cheatin, but won't get my tattles far
Another intro...this doesnt introduce the punch as well as his opener...but it works..
cuz i realized ur names missing the "W" like ur battles are
Opponents name = Reckless...usually spelled like Wreckless...witty personal...hitting very hard...
im waiting to beat Spul, a must when flowing, fuck..
Intro...he's wording it so his wordplay will work even better in the punch...
your hated so much.. u make a-rival just by showing up
Awesome wordplay...arrival is changed to a rival (enemy)...see people, it is dope...he makes the wordplay work by saing your hated so much...
i`ll wreck some, with no affection - get whored & perish
More of a filler intro...just there to make the 2nd bar to rhyme well...this is okay as long as most of your verse doesnt have it...
if you could step son, it'd be by a former marriage
Decent punch with sum wordplay...for the slow kids...Step Son---Former Marriage...get it?...thought so...
and remember that, whats the cost to be reminded?
Another one of those filler to rhyme well...
ya sig'll go from winning streak to "Loss to feeble minded"
A personal...not amazing but decent...
don't speak in my presence, faggot, itll end with hatred
Good intro to the wordplay and punch...this is a skill u must have to get better...
cuz ur room to talk is about to get fucking renovated
Tight punch and nice wordplay...kids that dont get it...Room's get renovated...yeah, of course, you knew that all along right?...
cuz you've got fans on here man, but confess it they ..
anticipating the punch...ahh!!
gave me more respect than u when I came here yesterday
Witty punch...these hit hard and have people chuckling...everyone needs to learn this attribute...
the lesson? sway, cuz u got no style for boastin kid
Intro to the punch...notice how he says style in the 1st bar to introduce his punch about his opponents form...getting it now?
matter fact, only kinda form u got is the one u posted in
Witty personal...hits hard....
its no guess i'll protest, but wont let up the beating
Ok...here comes the punch..
i mean.. my fists & ur face should set up a meeting
Decent...not amazing though...least fav bar of the verse
even Phenom-in-all hates u, nobody bought it though
Ok..setting up for the personal by mentioning Phenom in all...
till he said 'im out like spuls chance of makin good audio'
A personal that delivers a punch...i hope you can get it lol...
This should help...seriously...read it...study the styles...try to imitate it...word lets elevate people!