Ok..... Here we go....

Fix The Structure
Right now your structure is like this
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That structure is some what annoying...Bring it together like this

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It looks alot better...
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Wordplay

Your wordplay is pretty good.. just need to up the vocabulary
Try to use some Multies also....
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Punches And Personals

Right now... your punches are decent.. but not hard hitting
Try to dig up personals against the person your battling
And just put something together from that
It will make your verse come hard against them
And it will give you a better chance to win....
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Thats all i can really think of right now...
But i will come back when i think of something else

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